Monday, March 25, 2013

Phrase Treatment

Phrase Treatment “Do you want to hear what God revealed to me this morning?" Camera is low on the ground, above the shag of a burnt-orange carpet, the blue light of a TV static is flickering in a warmly lit room. The national anthem clicks on to begin that day's television programming The camera pans, still low on the ground the viewers left to right, book shelves in the background come into focus. On the bottom shelf we see a white floral decoration in a wide basket, above that a vase and small photos of children on either side and tidy rows of religious books. The scene blurs as if a child falling asleep on the floor…. ..the scene reopens, can you smell the smell of instant coffee coming from the kitchen table, which is inside the kitchen, which is right beyond the rigidly tailored plastic-like fabric of the couch. The camera closes in on the dark space between the couch and the shag carpeting.. A woman's feet are seen, facing the jumble of kitchen table & chair legs. She wears tan hosiery and white shoes with buckles around the ankles. She is singing, or humming disjointedly the stretched tune of a church song. The camera pans to the left. The darkness of the space the viewer now inhabits under the couch, merges slightly as the camera pans left into a narrow hallway, The sound of a heavy wooden drawer closing is heard then steps down the hallway. Emerging into the cut of light from the living room we see the feet of man, they are medium sized with old, but well taken care of black leather shoes. He says "Do you want to hear what God revealed to me this morning?" The camera rolls over past the couch upholstery to look at the TV set which is askew and blurry and typical voice of a TV evangelist is heard.

1 comment:

  1. This is an intriguing treatment. As written it is more experimental than narrative. To turn this into a narrative treatment something needs to happen. You have set an emotion and an aesthetic but there is a lack of story. This is an excellent introduction to a narrative story or it's an excellent experimental treatment. I'd like to see a stronger narrative storyline - beginning, middle, end.

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